My Lovely Mp4
Many kind electronics that use to listen to music, such as mp3, mp4,
cell phone or computer.
But, the most that I like is mp4. And do you know why?
just read my story and you'll know why..
I have a mp4 player that I brought everywhere.
I'm very interest with my mp4 player.
It was bought by my boyfriend because I want it for a long time.
So he gift me this mp4.
I like the specification. The trademark is "ADVANCE M7-1B"
with 1 GB capacity.
It does have radio FM tuner, voice recording, photo and text viewer,
USB flash disk,
LCD TFT display 1,5", built in speaker, and Lithium battery inside.
It is slim rectangle and the size is medium small.
It has a black color and made of kind of plastic.
On the below the screen has six buttons.
They are a menu button, a play button, a previous
track button, a next track button, and two volume buttons
in right and left side.
There are a hole charger and port USB beside a power button
and also a hole for headset
below those six buttons.
On the backside there are a hole speaker and a kind of painted art.
I fill it with music especially my favorite songs like
Secondhand Serenade's songs (your call and fall for you),
David Archuleta's songs
(crush and a little too not over you) and many more....
Can you imagine my mp4? Don't worry I gave you a picture.
I really like my mp4. If I felt bored I turn it on and I'll be fun again.
When I waited for a long time or have a break time in campus,
usually I spend my free time to listen my favorite songs.
I like my mp4 very much and I'll keep it safely.
"Many kind electronics that use to listen to..." should be "Many kind electronics that are used to listen to...";
ReplyDelete"I have a mp4 player that I brought everywhere" should be "I have an mp4 player that I bring everywhere"; (I suppose that you mean "yang kubawa kemana saja (dan kulakukan sampai sekarang)". Therefore, you must use present tense.);
"...I want it for a long time"
should be "I had been wanting it for a long time..."
Well, I don't want to reveal anymore mistakes. I pity you so much. Please, be very very careful about your tenses. Okay?! Keep studying for the best result!
Good composition...for me mp4 is boring killer
ReplyDeleteWhy does every girl like Archuleta? Is he better than Miley Cyrus?
ReplyDeleteAnyway, grammatical mistakes are common in everyone, but making correction is better. But, good writing anyway. Keep it up!
Hallo, Ris, I am looking forward of having a Mp4 too. But, I don't know whether I really need it or not. Oh yeah, you have a nice one. I saw its photo.
ReplyDeleteIt is better if you pay attention to what our friends, above, suggest you. OK, learn more...
Handle your Mp4 with care!! It's not a child's play! Huahahahahaha!!!
ReplyDeleteris..risss....you musr carry your mp4 so that u can remember your boyfriend everytime,n everywhere.
ReplyDeletenice nice nice . i love hearing music too . when i got a boring day, i always hear music with my hand phone . nice story, by the way
ReplyDeletei love music also, but i prefer to play the music with my cellphone or iPod...
ReplyDeletenice mp4...I had broken my mp3, I really need a new mp4..can your boy friend buy it for me too?
ReplyDeleteDon't give up Ris..
You can write better than this...
What do you mean by "I have a mp4 player that I brought everywhere"???
ReplyDeleteI know your Mp4...I have seen it...
I like music too... Keep up....!!!
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